Polishing the Gem

Jewel 6by Gayle Bartos-Pool

Part Five – Finding the Right Word


Stephen King said “Any word you have to hunt for in a Thesaurus is the wrong word.”

I beg to differ, Mr. King. Here’s why. If I have used the same word ad nauseam in several close paragraphs, I just gotta find another word. Your computer writing software usually has a few suggestions when you Right Click on Synonyms. And I have a really nice Thesaurus that I will turn to if the computer doesn’t come through.

But, come on, guys. We’re writers, authors, novelists, playwrights, wordsmiths for crying out loud. Words are our life. Personally, I like adding a few new words to my vocabulary every so often. And I definitely want to use some fresh, innovative, new-fangled words when writing just to shake things up a bit.

I’ll stumble over a boring, colorless, lackluster word when doing one of the many edits I complete before sending out a book for publication. The troublesome word will be sitting there like a wilted piece of lettuce, limp and begging to be tossed into the garbage…. (And, yes, I did use the Thesaurus on a few of the words in this recent paragraph just to make the point.)

So why not use the sources available and pick another word so you don’t sound tedious, uninteresting or just plain _____________. (You fill in the blank.)


Jewel 7Polishing the Gem

Part SixPicky Picky


Last, but not least, be picky about your work. Agonize over a word or sentence or paragraph until you think (or even feel) that it’s the right choice. Feeling’s okay, too. Your name is going to be on the work, so why not do your best?

Something I have mentioned before might be of help when doing that last slog through those thousands of words you have put on paper. Ask yourself three things:


Does it Advance the story?

Does it Enhance the story?

Is it Redundant?


These questions make you re-think aspects of your work. If you have a long section of dialogue that doesn’t add anything to the plot and it doesn’t get your characters any closer to their goals, cut it or rework it.

Idle chatter between characters about the weather or their latest boyfriend over tea or yet another lunch at the local tearoom can become stale especially if the weather doesn’t change, no storm is brewing, and the boyfriend’s body isn’t buried in their backyard. Make sure most of what your characters talk about actually has something to do with the story.

As for enhancing the plot or even who your characters are, take note: If a long section of great descriptive passages doesn’t set the stage, but rather clutters it up, trim it or make sure you don’t keep piling on more and more of the same thing every few pages. You might like all your great descriptions of period furniture or sweeping landscapes, but after a while it stops the action. When it’s done well, it is a joy. Too much detail starts sounding like a boring college lecture course. You know, the class you fell asleep in when the teacher droned on for an hour about one more Roman army siege of yet another small village in ZZZZZZZZZ.

Wake up!

Here’s another point: Enhancing your characters personality or description or painting a beautiful picture of the scenery in your story is great as long as you don’t keep putting too much makeup on the characters or clutter the scenery with too many trees so you can’t see the forest. You want a stunning image, not layers of paint.

As for the redundancy part, during your final read-through as you are editing your work, check to see if you have said the same thing twice. During your final read-through as you are editing your work, check to see if you have said the same thing twice. (See how redundancy gets to be a problem? That sentence was in there twice.) Whether you repeat yourself in the same paragraph or page or chapter or throughout the book, it gets old and your reader will think you are either padding your word count or not paying attention.

As you polish your gem, remember another thing: if you file off the rough edges, sharpen the angles, and buff out the dull areas, the reader will come back for more. Everybody admires a beautiful jewel. Write On!  (And Read On Below)

Jewel 8

Let me add one more little tidbit. Several years ago I published The Anatomy of a Short Story Workbook. It was to accompany a class I taught by the same name. It is a quick reference to writers as to how to get those few chosen words on a page in a short story as well as a novel, screenplay, or even an article you might be writing. As a member of The Writers-in-Residence group, I have also written many blogs on the art of writing. Many times I just expanded on the points I made in the Anatomy book. Recently I compiled those many blogs into a new book: So You Want to be a Writer. It gives some history to my own career and some expanded thoughts on writing. You might find it helpful in your writing journey.

So You Want to be a Writer Amazon cover 2  anatomy-book-cover

Author: gbpool

A former private detective and once a reporter for a small weekly newspaper, Gayle Bartos-Pool (writing as G.B. Pool) writes three detective series: the Gin Caulfield P.I. series (Media Justice, Hedge Bet & Damning Evidence), The Johnny Casino Casebook Series, and the Chance McCoy detective series. She also penned a series of spy novels, The SPYGAME Trilogy: The Odd Man, Dry Bones, and Star Power. She has a collection of short stories in From Light To DARK, as well as novels: Eddie Buick’s Last Case, Enchanted: The Ring, The Rose, and The Rapier, The Santa Claus Singer, and three delightful holiday storied, Bearnard’s Christmas, The Santa Claus Machine, and Every Castle Needs a Dragon. Also published: CAVERNS, Only in Hollywood, and Closer. She is the former Speakers Bureau Director for Sisters in Crime/Los Angeles and also a member of Mystery Writers of America and The Woman’s Club of Hollywood. She teaches writing classes: “Anatomy of a Short Story,” (The Anatomy of a Short Story Workbook and So You Want to be a Writer are available.) “How To Write Convincing Dialogue” and “Writing a Killer Opening Line” in sunny Southern California. Website: www.gbpool.com.

16 thoughts on “Polishing the Gem”

  1. I agree with you, Gayle. A thesaurus is just a tool. And a useful one. As for finding the right word, to paraphrase Mark Twain: The difference between the right word and the wrong word is the difference between lightning and the lightning bug.

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    1. To add to what you mentioned, Paul, I like to add lots of tools to my creative shed whether they come from other books, movies, or just thinking. Words are everywhere. We just need to find that gem that fits.


  2. Oh Gayle, agree with you 100+ percent (if there is such a thing.) Polishing our jewels not only takes us steps forward in our writing craft/art– but I think, crucial parts of the JOY of writing. There’s a word I’m thinking of that expresses what I’m trying to say perfectly, off to my thesaurus to find it…(smile)

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    1. Mad, there is a personal satisfaction in a job well done. If we give our writing our best, we can send our work out into the world with a smile.


  3. It’s early morning, A time when I really like to write and create.What I liked the most about you or post is that it synthesizes and selects the best way to make your points. I think those thoughts when I’m writng but I wrote down your points to keep nearby as a reminder -making them practical and useful for me all through my writing. Thank you for a terrific post.

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  4. Gayle, you’ve outdone yourself with this post! I get my best ideas and breakthroughs on my daily walks. Also when driving, or whenever I’m not actually writing but the story is brewing in my brain. Reading aloud uncovers all kinds of flaws and I consider the thesaurus to be indispensable.

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    1. Thanks, Maggie. I get great ideas away from the computer, too. There are notepads all over the house just in case I need to write them down before they fade into the ether.

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  5. The thing I love about your posts, GB, is the way your voice comes through. I can almost hear you talking as I read your words, as if you were right there in the room with me. And I utterly concur—words are our most vital tool. Speaking for myself, my ancient, battered thesaurus is often my go-to resource in choosing the right word. Saves a lot of time and head-scratching/hair-pulling! Great post.

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    1. Bonnie, my Aunt Mollie gave me my Thesaurus when I got out of high school. It still comes in handy because I do like to play with words and polish my work.


  6. Gayle – another terrific blog. I have learned so much from you over the years – and I often use your three questions (Does it advance the story? etc) whenever I am questioning something I have just written.
    Thanks – great job.

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  7. Thanks, Rosie. I have that advice about Advancing, Enhancing, and Redundancy taped to my computer. It has helped me often.


  8. Gayle, your post demonstrates your point – the importance of words. Choosing the precise ones to express what you want to say and whittling them down to what you need to say it can make the difference between writing and great writing. Well stated.

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    1. As you know, as writers turn out more books they realize how important those words are. Sometimes lots of description is perfect; sometimes it is too much. Good writers know the difference.


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